考前必读 – 2015年4月份写作小范围预测机经思路
(济南新东方国外考试部 赵波)
各位托友好,波波老师从4月份机经中精心筛选出三道较新而且思考难度较大的题目,写出较为详尽的思路和细节,希望能帮助大家做好考前的临门一脚。
NO.1
Some people believe that the extracurricular activities and afterschool homework of children should be assigned by the school, while others claim that children should be allowed to choose to do what they want after school.
波波老师点睛:题目本身是A or B的选择题,很明显这个题目我们可以使用让步—转折—递进结构,先让步承认学校规定孩子课后作业挺好的,然后转折说,孩子自己决定课后内容也不错。最后,到底哪种更好取决于学校面向的学生年龄。
题目分析:
全文思路结构:
让步:学校规定孩子做的课后活动挺好的,因为学校可以指导孩子做一些有意义的事情,从而增长他们的知识。
it is undeniable that schools should assign some activities to students after school, because school could guide students to do something valuable and meaningful, and thus help them gain more knowledge.
转折:孩子课后自己选择做一些事情也挺好的,因为可以更好培养孩子的兴趣,开发自己的潜能。
However, it is significant for students to choose the acticities they like, since it is a better way for them to cultivate their own interests and increase their potential capabilities.
递进:在我看来,孩子们应该自己决定课下的活动而不是完成老师指定的任务,因为这样可以培养孩子的独立能力。
From my standpoint, instead of following teachers, students should choose the activities by themselves students should finish the tasks chosen by themselves instead of those assigned by teachers, in order to build up their independence. In the process of choosing the activities they prefer, the students will accumulate the experience of making an independent decision.
NO.2
(A/D)The food we eat today is much healthier than in the past.
波波老师点睛:题目实际上是一种古今对比的题目,即过去和现在食物的健康性对比。对于古今对比类题目笔者推荐使用“总分总”的结构,在段内进行现在和过去进行对比论证,即现在如何如何,过去如何如何。笔者的观点是不同意,认为食物在过去比现在更健康。
全文思路结构:
理由一:农药化肥的使用:(agriculture chemicals/ fertilizer)随着现代农业技术(农药化肥)的使用,现在的食物被污染了,过去的食物是纯天然的,(To begin with, the wide use of agriculture chemicals and fertilizers make the food today unhealthier than the food in the past). This is because the food today are polluted by these chemical material. For example, in the past, people cleaned the weeps to safeguard the corn in the field by manual labors. However, farmers will use herbicide and chemicals to achieve this goal. Therefore, some poisonous material will remain on the crops we eat.
理由二:饮食习惯的改变:(changes in the habit of eating are another factor in making the food today much unhealthier) 随着生活节奏的加快,人们更多的会选择吃快餐,而这些快餐是一些垃圾食品,对我们的身体会有负面影响,比如说造成肥胖,疾病等。(with the life pace accelerating, people today tend to eat the fast food which is nothing but junk food. By contrast, in the past, people have more spare time, they would like to cook by themselves) 在过去人们生活更加悠闲,所以会选择在家里自己做饭。
结尾段:有些人认为现在的食物比过去的食物更健康,因为人们吃的食物种类比以前更丰富了。但是这个理由和我们观点的理由比起来暗淡无光。 所以我还是认为过去的食物比现在的食物更健康。(Some people may assert that food today is much healthier, because there are more diverse food than before. However, this reason seems lackluster compared with that of our opinion.)
NO.3
Should school focus more on purchasing new equipment or recruiting good teachers?
波波老师点睛:这个题目是一个二选一的问题,对于这样的题目我们可以选择,让步—转折—递进的结构,即先去承认购买新设备的重要性,然后强调好教师的重要性,最后递进总结,两者对于学校的重要性取决于学校面向的学生年龄。
全文思路结构:
让步: 购买新设备对于学校来说至关重要,因为先进的教学设施给老师的教学和学生的学习带来诸多便利。因此,授课效果和学习效率都会相应提高。电脑和实验器材就可以作为两个很好的例子。通过电脑,老师可以从网络上下载更多的备课资料,大大减少搜集资料的时间。同时老师还可以使用PPT来展示授课内容,让课堂更生动。学生课下可以利用丰富的网络资源,来增长知识。另外,老师可以利用实验器材来向学生直观的展现实验过程,学生也可以在老师的指导下亲自完成实验,这都会让教学变得简单。(Purchasing new equipments is of great importance to the school, in that the advanced facilities will bring many benefits to the teaching of professors as well as the study of children. As a result, the teaching effect and learning efficiency will be improved a lot accordingly. The computer and experiment apparatus can cast some light on (prove) my viewpoint.)
转折:雇佣好的老师对学校来说也必不可少,因为好老师能够传授学生更多的知识,培养学生的学习兴趣。众所周知,一个学校的教育质量很大程度上取决于老师。比如说,一个好的天文学老师在教授天文学概念比如在太阳系中的行星时,可能会和西方神话故事相结合,这样学生对课上的知识会掌握的更牢固,而且非常有可能会受到启发,自己课下去查询相关的网站,以获取更多的信息。相比而言,普通的老师可能只进行枯燥的概念介绍,让学生感到课堂无聊,打消他们的学习热情( give a damper to their learning passion)。(However, hiring good teachers is also an integral part of a school, since famous teachers are able to impart more knowledge to students and thus cultivate their interest in study. As is known to all, the educational quality of a school mainly relies on the teachers. For instance, a good astronomy professor may combine the westen myths with the basic astronimical terms in the process of introducing the planets in the solar system. In order to make students memorize Jupiter more easily, he firstly tell students the Jupiter is the most powerful god in the Greece myth and thus the Jupiter is the largest planet in the solar system. )
递进:在我看来,到底学校应该更关注设备的更新还是好老师的招聘,取决于学校内学生的年龄阶段。如果是小学,好老师更重要,因为童年时期是孩子培养学习习惯和人格的关键时期,而老师对孩子这些方面的影响是不可替代的。相反,对于大学来说,购买设备更重要,因为学生需要通过这些设备来自学。
In my perspective, whether school should pay more attention to renovating the equipment or hiring more good teachers depends on the age of the students in the school. To be specific, in the elementary school, employing a good teacher is more important because childhood is a significant period for children to foster their learning habit and build up their characteristic, all of which are significantly affected by teachers. in contrast, it is necessary for the university to purchase new equipment, since students need learn by themselves / do self-learning / learn on their own by using facilities.
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