托福写作备考第一阶段：仿写

文本输入，词句习得。首先先将范文略读易变，之后回到第一行，逐字逐句阅读，并将范文中好的语言表达、新东方词汇搭配标记出来。
　　1.Do you agree or disagree with the following statement？People should take several different kinds of jobs before they take a career in a long term. [2009. 1.23]
　　Today's economy is diverse and full of opportunities. While there are some people that are able to study a subject or skill and then upon graduation jump right into their career， more and more people are choosing a less traditional path to their careers. Before starting their careers，they try many different kinds of jobs. I believe having many different kinds of jobs helps establish a foundation for success in one's future career.
　　原义输出：第一步：翻译；第二部：对照翻译自己写。
　　当今的经济变化多样而且充满了机遇。虽然（连词，表示前后的比较，也可用来指让步）有些人（定语从句，后置）能够学一个科目或者技能然后一毕业（介词词组）就直接工作，但越来越多的人还是会选择一个不那么传统（比较级的否定）的职业道路。在开始职业生涯前（分词表状语从句的省略），他们尝试很多不同的工作。我相信有很多不同的工作帮助为成功奠定基础在某人的未来职业生涯中（状语习惯后置句末）。
　　The most compelling reason that recent graduates nowadays are choosing to work many different kinds of jobs is because it helps them figure out what they truly want to do. People are realizing that if you find a career you love， you will not have to work a day in your life. In the long run， this is a very smart move. If people take the time to test out many different jobs， they will know which one is the job they want to do for the rest of their lives. I know many people in older generations that talk about how they did not have a choice in their career. They always explain how they started teaching or nursing simply because that was the best option. They are not happy with their careers and with regret that they could not choose the best career. Working many jobs helps young workers determine their future careers.
　　现在的毕业生都选择很多不同工作的（定语从句，后置）最令人信服的原因是因为这能帮助他们想清楚他们什么是他们真实想要做的。人们意识到如果你找到了你所爱的职业生涯，你一生将不再需要工作一天。那么长期来看，这就是个非常明智的举措。如果人们花点时间去尝试很多不同的工作，他们将知道哪个是他们想下半辈子都想要做的职业。我知道有很多老一辈的人们他们（定语从句，后置）谈论他们如何无法选择自己的职业生涯。他们总是解释他们如何开始教书或者做护士仅仅因为那是当时最好的选择。他们自己的职业生涯不快乐而且满怀遗憾的（介词短语做状语）他们不能够选择最好的职业。多做不同的工作（动名词作主语）就能帮助年轻人决定他们的未来职业。
　　（本段多次用到疑问词引导的宾语从句，注意从句中语序应该是陈述句而非疑问句语序。例如I don't know what I should do.而不是I don't know what should I do.）
　　In addition， gaining experience in many different kinds of jobs helps make people more competitive. When companies hire employees， they look for applicants with diverse backgrounds and a range of experiences. This is practical business sense， since a person with many different experiences can be expected to do many different kinds of jobs. For example， an information technology company cannot just hire employees who know about computers. They must hire people who are familiar with the content. If the company is responsible for creating an educational database for history teachers， having employees who have had prior experience in education and history are the most valuable. By holding many different jobs before starting a career， a person can be more competitive in the job market.
　　而且，在很多不同工作里（状语，后置）获得（动名词做主语）经验帮助让人梦更加有竞争力。当工作雇佣员工的时候，他们寻找有不同背景和各种经验的（介词短语表修饰，后置）申请者。这是实际的商业常识，因为有很多不同经验的（介词短语表修饰，后置）一个人有很多不同经验的能被期待做很多不同的工作。比方说，一个信息科技公司不能雇佣只知道电脑的（定语从句，后置）员工。他们必须雇佣熟悉内容（定语从句，后置）的人们。如果公司负责制造一个给历史老师的（介词短语表修饰，后置）教育数据库，拥有（动名词做主语）具有在教育和历史方面有先前经验的（定语从句，后置）员工是最宝贵的。通过做过很多不同工作在开始职业生涯之前（分词表状语从句的省略），一个人能在就业市场里（状语习惯后置到句末）更加有竞争力。
　　Once you start your career， having a diverse background will help you accomplish more with your job. For example， my father first worked as a waiter before he became a writer for an advertisement agency. One of his first accounts was for the restaurant T.G.I.F. My father used his experience as a waiter as inspiration for the advertisement campaign 【they ran】. The restaurant was so pleased with my father's work that they signed an exclusive contract with his company. Soon after that he was promoted and later went on to become the youngest manager of the creative department in the history of this advertising agency. Using knowledge from past jobs gives you the perspective to rise quickly in your career.
　　一旦你开始了你的职业生涯，有（动名词做主语）多种多样背景能帮助你在工作上（状语习惯后置到句末）成就更多。比方说，我的父亲在他成为广告公司作家之前（状语，后置）开始做的是服务员。他最早期的描述之一是给一个T.G.I.F.的餐馆。我父亲用了他做服务生的经历作为他们运行的（定语从句，后置）广告活动的灵感。餐馆非常满意我父亲的工作所以他们和他的公司签了一份独家合同。那之后很快就被提升了后来继续成为了他们广告公司历史上（状语习惯后置到句末）最年轻的创意部门的经理。使用（动名词做主语）过去工作的知识给你视角来（to do表目的）让你在职业生涯中晋升更快。
　　Holding many different jobs before starting your career is a smart thing to do. Building your resume with a range of jobs helps you decide which career is best for you. The various experiences not only make you more competitive than other job applicants， but it also（注意语序） helps you be a more valuable and resourceful employee. (Anna， 529 words)
　　在开始职业生涯前（分词表状语从句的省略）做（动名词做主语）很多不同工作是一个明智的做法。用各种工作经历来（介词短语表方式）塑造（动名词做主语）你的简历帮你决定哪个工作生涯是对你最好的。各种各样的经历不但使你比其他的求职者更加有竞争力，而且帮你成为一个更有价值和足智多谋的雇员。
　　查漏补缺：将自己写的文章与原文逐字逐句对照。
　　对照工具：word上方“审阅”工具栏中的“修订”功能，打开即可。
　　有些虽与原文不同，但只是同义词之间的互换不是问题。注意：1）自己在仿写时脑海空白不知如何表达的语料 2）自己表达时候难免出现的中式表达（可能在用词可能在句型）这是要重点进行对照的。
　　同学们，通过仿写（输入--输出--比照），你可以：
　　1）积累一定的语感。（语感就是通过大量重复形成的语言习惯，而不是对语法规则的机械记忆）
　　2）语法得到一定的改善。（如动词做主语要变为动名词，比如完整句子后面的动词表伴随或者推导要用分词形式，比如并列结构的形式要满足一致，再比如定语在英文中的表达习惯都会后置到名词之后，还有状语在中文中习惯放句中而英文习惯放在句末的习惯…）
　　3）积累一定的话题词汇。
　　而你到底可以积累多少，取决与你仿写多少文章，我们的建议是一周至少两篇文章，但是如果你的要求更高，那就请加大仿写剂量吧！

2015-01-26 16:07

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