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　　Some people think that some lessons for young students (aged 5 - 8) with video games are effective and interesting, but other people think this way is distracting and a waste of time. What’s your opinion?

　　【引出话题：Education is a perpetual topic in our times.】 【回到题目关键词：In order to make sure that children can totally focus on their schoolwork, most parents are inclined to cut their kids’ connection to any entertaining products like video games.】 【引出争议：But, when it comes to whether it’s a good way to add some lessons with video games for young students, different people hold different opinions.】 【给出己方立场 + 概括中间段论点：As far as I’m concerned, a lesson with videos games is not a good choice for those kids, since it’s a threat for both kids’ study and health.】

　　【分论点一：On the one hand, it would distract students’ attention from study that the school gives some lessons with video games.】 【讲道理：As we all know, kids are born to be curious about everything around, especially games. So, it’s not surprising to observe that they’d be easily attracted by those video games shown in the classroom, thus getting addicted to them in their daily life. In this case, their priority in the school would be shifted from study to games.】 【举例子：Take my young cousin Tim as a case in point. He was 7-year-old at that time and it was his first year in the primary school. One day, for the purpose of teaching them what the racing car really was, Tim’s teacher showed them a video game on it named Need for Speed. Of course, all students were appealed to such a class. Unfortunately, most of them, including Tim, got so interested that they downloaded this game and spent lots of time playing it and even talking about it in the school. Anyway, when the academic report of that semester came out, my uncle was really pissed off.】 【小总结：So, offering young students such a kind of lesson does bring damage to their academic performance.】

　　【分论点二：On the other hand, apart from affecting young kids’ study negatively, a lesson with video games also exerts detrimental effects on their health, their eyesight in particular.】 【讲道理：As we discussed a moment ago, kids could possibly get addicted to those video games and thus spend tons of time on them. What’s even worse is that staring at the screen for a long time when they play games could greatly harm young students’ eyesight.】 【举例子：According to a survey conducted by Education Ministry of China, approximately 30% of students in the primary school in 2015 wore glasses. However, this figure in the end of last century, when the the Internet and video games just started getting popular in China, was only 8%.】 【小总结：Therefore, the great difference between these 2 figures clearly indicates that spending too much time on games or the screen is not friendly to young kids’ health.】

　　【重申立场 + 总结论点】Judging from what we’ve discussed above, I can safely draw the conclusion that it’s not a wise choice to offer young students some lessons with video games, on account of the negative effects they bring to kids’ study and health.

　　作者介绍：

　　姓名：钟萍

　　英文名：John

　　国籍：中国

　　教授课程：托福写作

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